opinions please? angel baby.x?

Question

Im 15, and recently lost my beautiful baby boy at 19 weeks on the 4/9/13. I have decided to apply for britians got talent, not because i have a talent but to make other mothers who have lost a.child feel like their not alone, Im going to say a poem. Tell me what you think and if i could improve it in anyway..

Born sleeping is such a beautiful saying,
Always touches me to the core.
The broken cries of a Mummy's heart
When you just can't take anymore.

I open my heart, one to another,
So you never lose your hope,
That although it gets no easier,
I promise you'll learn to cope.

Remember your Angel is sleeping
In a world much kinder than ours
And will always be there to hold your hand
Even in your darkest hours.

Nomatter how many people tell you
that time Will heal your pain
not even the longest time
Will bring our angels back again

My own tiny angel will keep an eye,
And play with yours in their park.
But you must find your love and strength,
And feed your own small spark.

You'll never be alone
I will always understand.
If you ever feel like giving up
Just reach out and grab my hand.

Please let me know what you think.x

Answer 1

Olivia that is beautiful



Kiim i want to smash you round the face with a fuc'king hammer you dirty bit'ch, how dare you say that to someone!

Answer 2

It's beautiful just the way it is. It's from the heart. <3

Answer 3

this is to kiim not olivia: you are disgusting, who the hell tells someone to be grateful for a dead child? get help, you seriously need it.

Answer 4

You're 15, lost your baby and you're upset? You should be kinda greatful, now hopefully you take responsibility and tell your "boyfriend" to wrap it up